Treatment

Treatment- No Destiny

Genre: Drama, Action

Ideas from two teenage deaths happening in London

Nikki is a lonely 15 year old girl in her own world. She doesn’t like anyone from her family and she doesn’t like anyone in school accept one girl called Samantha, which is her closest friend. Everyone in her area judges her based on the way she looks. They tend to gossip about her behind her back, but she knows they talk about her.

On a casual mourning Nikki walks to the fridge; pulls out milk and pours her glass half full. She then walks to her schoolbag, stands still to look around and pulls out a plastic bag containing a gun into her schoolbag.

Nikki then wears her school bag on her shoulders and leaves her house. 10 mins later she’s down the road from sixth form then enters the premises. At first sight she sees Sam walking to her; they exchange a few words of dialogue about what they had done during the weekend. The first bell rings and everyone goes off to lesson, however Nikki decides not to go to lesson and Sam leaves her. She then texts Sam saying “I’m waiting for you come near the canteen”.

Nikki then starts to roam about on the school premises. She then decides to go to the toilet, but then sees the bullies that she’s feared for years.

One of the bullies calls out “Oi Nikki puss comes here”. She starts to walk in the opposite direction, but they catch up with her and drag her outside. They then start to beat her up; she’s screaming, but everyone is in class.

They run off and she stands up and she can hear voices in her head of people laughing at her. Then she starts to cry; she then runs off to the toilet and she sits down in the corner crying.

She clenches her bag and then drops it. The gun falls out of the bag. She starts to shake and then picks up the gun and then we see the outside of the toilet. A loud bang goes off!

Feedback from first pitch

“Likes it that it’s a school drama and we can relate to it because it happens a lot today”

“The way we have the letters on the fridge and on the milk is creative”.

“I like the use of imagery”.